Chapter: 4. Chapter 03: A Time for War
From: sanctum_fw ()
You updated. YOU UPDATED THIS.
I'm kind of embarrassed -- okay, a whole lot embarrassed -- to admit that I actually started sniffling when I realized you'd written new material for this. You'd gotten me hook, line, and sinker with the previous chapters, and then you took a REALLY. LONG. BREAK.
Considering that was right around the time when I'd just discovered that my favorite fantasy game of all time had its very own fandom, and that there were actually good writers in that fandom, well... you'd dealt a crushing blow, shall we say.
I eventually found other good writers, but I never forgot about this story. You've got a smooth style that drew me in fast; angst enough to feed the muses; that good kind of crazy, almost black, humor that I thrive on; and the way your characters come alive for me in that show-not-tell way: I loved this, and I don't have words enough to express it. Cloud's klutziness, Aeris' cheer, Zack's determination, and Sephiroth's sheer wariness were wonderful to see. The details of canon characterization were spot-on.
A huge plus was the way how the Destruct materia made its appearance: the thing that Seph threw at Cloud's head which eventually lead to his demise hath staged its entrance and instead saved him this time around!
On the minus side, the details are still really rather lacking and somewhat vague: events seem incomplete in their descriptions, and the characters have nearly reached becoming two-dimensional at this point in the plot, with still a ways to go to becoming fully fleshed-out PEOPLE. But, it's early yet (hurray for time travel! :) and the fat lady is still backstage practicing her chords.
Have faved this, and will await further development eagerly. (And if you aren't offended by me offering my services, hit me on Yah00 should you still need a beta reader.)
I've never actually had someone point out so many good things I've never been aware of, and get spot-on the bad that I've been stewing over for months noticing and trying to figure out a way to fix. I've been so touched by the reviews I've gotten for this fic because while yes, I do love praise, and that's one part of why I do it, I've never considered anything I write to particularly memorable. Stuff like the above makes me think, hey, that might not be the case. It's a nice feeling. ^_^
If only they'd left an email address, I really am in sore need of a beta/someone to bounce ideas off of. Oh well. Score one for allowing anon to stick around! :D
Edit: Fixed the Comment Screening, didn't know I had that on. o.O;;